Wiki Page, ELA 10A - Heintschel - Tri 1: Tue 10.5: Fluency + Writing Rubric and Student Sample + Feedback on 2 Paragraphs

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#21 – Fluency: letter to younger self

Write a letter to your younger self.

Remember that you’re writing to show rather than tell the reader.

We finished using the rubric to evaluate what the student writer KNOWS, what the students writer is ABLE TO DO, and what the student writer can focus on for future improvement.

We saw that the writer knows to include a main claim, use context to relate to the audience, to use evidence (both quotes and paraphrasing), to include alternate views, and to write a conclusion that flows from the writing and that says something about the main claim.

But we also saw that the writer needs to explain the connections between their evidence and their claims. They also need to set-up the quotes with context instead of leaving them floating.

I introduced you to the KNOWN-NEW CONTRACT.

This is an agreement that each sentence will build on what comes before. Start with something known, and then say something new. That "something new" becomes part of the "known" for the next sentence.

Example:

Songsam doesn't kill Tokchae [known] because his memories of the past change his mind [new]. The memories remind Songsam of times when he and Tokchae were close. When Songsam remembers falling out of the chestnut tree [known], he is reminded that Tokchae helps him pick the thorns from his rear and even shared some of his chestnuts [new]. This kindness [known] creates a conflict in his heart [new].

Then, we looked at your score and feedback for the "Characterize Yourself in Two Paragraphs" assignment from week 2.

Remember that you received 15/15 if you wrote 2, 8-sentence paragraphs and if both focus on one answer to the prompt.

You should view the rubric and READ THE FEEDBACK I LEFT FOR YOU.

You will find that I point out things that are working for you in your writing. And, if necessary, I gave suggestions for fixing problems.

I want ALL of you to re-read your paragraphs and see if you notice an opportunity to transform a "telling" sentence to "showing"

Tomorrow, we write!